Dear Professor Blackstone
I am writing this e-mail to
introduce myself to you formally. My name is Nurul Sharfirin, but you may
address me as Nurul. I am a first-year civil engineering student in Singapore
Institute of Technology (SIT).
In 2011, I graduated from
Temasek Polytechnic with a diploma in intelligent building technology. Upon
graduating, I worked for the Housing & Development Board (HDB) as an estate
executive for six years. I tended to numerous feedback and complaints. Common
issues faced by the residents were spalling concrete and water seepage. Some of
the difficulties I faced include not being able to determine the source of the
water seepage and not being able to answer the residents’ queries due to my
lack of technical knowledge in buildings.
Working for HDB gave me the
opportunity to converse with various groups of people, which include the
management, supervisors, colleagues, contractors, and residents. Therefore, my
communication strength would be my ability to adapt my communication style to
different audiences, which includes people of different generations. Apart from
that, I would think before I speak so as not to offend the listener or convey
the wrong information.
As for my communication
weakness, I can be a poor listener at times. When someone is talking to me, I
would be thinking of a reply instead of listening to the person attentively.
Therefore, I sometimes would misinterpret the message that the speaker is
trying to relay, which may result in misunderstandings.
I hope that by the end of this
module, I would gain the ability to speak and write confidently and acquire
effective interpersonal communication skills.
I look forward to your upcoming
lessons. Thank you.
Best regards
Nurul
CVE 1281
Group 4A
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Commented on Syahiran’s, Yong Xing’s and Jayce’s Introduction Posts
Dear Nurul,
ReplyDeleteThank you for being one of the very first to make a post in Group 4. In terms of your letter, I appreciate the detail of your descriptions and the good fluency throughout this reflection. This letter is highly informative, and you make a clear statement of your professional experience and why you became interested in civil engineering.
There are a couple minor language issues to take note of:
1. verb tense
-- These situations made me wonder why such problems occur and if there are methods to improve it, which ultimately led me to enrol in this programme. > ?
2. Punctuation
-- with various groups of people which include the management, supervisors, colleagues, contractors, and residents > (lack of comma)
These are minor issues though. Overall, this is a fine introduction.
Best wishes,
Brad
Hi Nurul,
ReplyDeleteIt was nice getting to know more about you from your introduction.
Just some opinions from me:
1)"I tended to numerous feedback and complaints"
I would rephrase it as "I attended to numerous feedback and complaints"
2)"my communication strength would be my ability to adapt my communication style to different audiences, which includes people of different generations."
I would rephrase it as "my strength in communication would be my ability to adapt my style of communication to various audiences of different generations."
3)"I would think before I speak so as not to offend the listener"
I think it should be "so as to not offend".
I wish you all the best in achieving your learning outcomes.
Cheers,
Lu Sheng
Dear Nurul
ReplyDeleteYou provide a great short and sweet content for your letter.
You may consider my feedbacks from me:
1. [Therefore, my communication strength would be..]
== Therefore, one of my communication strengths would be..
2. [Some of the difficulties I faced include not being able to determine the source of the water seepage and not being able to answer the residents’ queries due to my lack of technical knowledge in buildings.]
== The sentence seems lengthy.
All the best for your future endeavours! Thank you.
Best Regards
Baizurah
Hi Nurul,
ReplyDeletegreat insight on your background.
I would like to point out a mistake that I noticed.
Paragraph 3:
"Working for HDB gave me the opportunity to converse with various groups of people, which include the management, supervisors, colleagues, contractors, and residents."
(order of list to be in alphabetical order; "...which include the colleagues, contractors, management, residents and supervisors."
Looking forward to learn more skills with you in class.
Cheers,
Yuan Lin